Thursday, 28 May 2015

We had to write a quick write about this photo it won the Auckland photo competition and is a very good photo. We had to use complex sentences like serial sentences,opener sentences, and interrupter sentences we also had to use short sharp sentences this is my writing.


                                                            The Jump

 As I walk over the undulated wharf, with no shoes on, the city as a backdrop. As I walk forward, with my friends by me watching. I hear the waves forcing against the wharf. I see boats, buildings and fish. I think to myself should I be doing this could it be dangerous and then I think just do it it’s not that bad.

I set, Prepare, and lunge. As I fall, I felt so free. So alive. My arms were wide apart stretched out and flying through the sky. Then I realize that I’m about to hit the water and hope it won’t be too cold. I hit the water with pace and get covered in cold refreshing water.  As I popped out of the water, I felt so refreshed and alive. I had done it. I was so proud of myself, I could have done it again.While I was trying to get back up, and slipped and fell into the water and got a fright, I thought to myself just take your time. I tried again and succeeded. I got to the top and felt so awesome like I had achieved a new goal. I did it.

Tuesday, 19 May 2015

The Smash

                                                                   The Smash
                 We have been trying to make a poem with verbs, 2 stanzas, each new idea                                                              on a new line and as much limited words as possible.
                                                           Here is mine it is about the smash.

The Smash
                                                Its tied
                                                Set each stuck on the scoreboard
                                                6-6 in 3rd, match point
                                                The crowd is silent, tense
                                                Everyone off there sets
                                                Watching intently
                                                Waiting for end result
                                                I prepare myself for what might happen
                                                I wait
                                                As ball travels up towards me.
                                                I Set,
                                                Ready to unleash my power
                                                As it gets closer to me
                                               I explode up into the ball with acceleration
                                                Which forced the ball back with more power.

Monday, 11 May 2015

Writing to the unknown soldier

Part of our Inquiry was to write the unknown soldier. We had to use complex sentences  short powerful sentences and paragraphs.

This below is my Writing to the unknown soldier.

To the unknown soldier  

 I'm writing to you because I want you to know that on the 25th of April for the last 100 years we have been remembering you and your effort. Your effort that has made our country free with no war. You have sacrificed yourself so that we can all run around without having to worry about war.

I do not know what your name is, but I do know that you would have found it a struggle. How did you feel when you went to war? We have heard some of you thought it would be an adventure. I guess they were wrong. Was it scary putting on your uniform for the first time or did you feel proud to be representing your country.We have heard that some of you felt proud and like a hero.

I wonder if you were there to bury the dead or were you the dead being buried.  Were you a soldier? We have learned that some of the soldiers had to carry a gun and about thirty kilograms on your back and that some of the soldiers had to live with rats, mice and lice. Gross. Although  it would have been very hot and sweaty, did you cut your uniform.

I can not imagine how hard it would have been to fight in those conditions and you were one of those that fought and went really for a pointless reason. War - which killed all those hundreds of thousands of innocent people that were just trying to do as they were told and got killed.

I’m only 11 years old. Warm, safe and dry thanks to you. I thank you very much for your heroic effort.

Yours sincerly
Luke Winter